Hey Rachel and McKenzie! I am so sorry this blog is so late, I have been at a swim meet all day and just arrived home. I have been having some trouble thinking of a way to transition from our first paragraph to our second. I think it should be unique and interesting. This would help the essay flow nicely and make it interesting to read. I have also been working on my commentary for my body paragraph. My goal is to elaborate on the concrete detail without stating the obvious.
Questions:
How should we transition from the first paragraph to the second (small lies to identity lies)?
Should we connect our intro and conclusion with the hook (mother's wanring) or should we use something different?
Should we stay in the same format as the 5 part paragraphs (transition, detail, two commentary etc.) or should we just write the paragraphs and check to see if we have everything?
Answers... In my opinion
ReplyDeleteQuestions two: I think it all depends on if we use the definition of truth at the bottom. If we did I don't think we would need to connect with the same characters in the hook. However, if we didn't I think we should, because it would connect will. Using the same characters from the different analogies would help the readers understand the flow of the paragraph instead of introducing new ideas.
Question 3: If you feel comfortable writing without the 5 part paragraph form you could do that, but I think it would be easier just to coordinate with the 5 part paragraph because of trying to fit it all together on Monday.
Question 1: I haven't fully published my paper yet...I will tell you as soon as possible tomorrow. Thanks, Rachel
1.Um I'm not too sure on this actually. I will have to read her post on transitions (I haven't yet :P) and then I will think about it. As I told Rachel to do, you should eMail yourself your paragraph so then we could make necessary changes in class.
ReplyDelete2.I think Rachel is right about the connection of the hook to the conclusion. We in some way should show how everything went full circle instead of having a random analogy at the beginning that we didnt do anything with or introducing new ideas in the end.
3.Ok well i wrote in the 5pp form but you dont have to. I think its a good structure to make sure that you dont miss anything but if you think that you could navigate away from that form a bit and still be sure you included everything it could be a nice break from the neverend 5pp. :)